Gods, this was fabulous. Loved the whole thing, but here are my favorite parts...
Okay, I love all of the beginning so much I can't choose. *grins*
"So that’s the way it’s going to work, you hear? One life, one death, and fuck you and your judgment, playing with people like your little cowboys and Indians, plastic figures you lose to the lawn mower and run over with your station wagon, doesn’t matter, there are more where they came from.
And the lights start to flicker. Dean resolutely does not think of it as a sign."
I love this ultimatum he gives the universe, and immediately senses that the universe doesn't give a fuck what he thinks...
"Frank is screaming, and a baby is screaming, and a woman is screaming, and Dean is tempted to join in, since it seems like the thing to do. Except, no."
Bwah ha ha! I just love how you balance the drama with the funny throughout this whole thing. There's a wonderfully crafted feeling of dread lying beneath the whole thing, but you keep it from slipping into maudlin with little things like this.
and this...killed me dead...
No time to explain it to her as well as to the emergency response woman, so he holds a finger to his lips and repeats his story at a slower pace with a few more details, trying to block out the sound of the squalling baby. The sound cuts off so quickly that Dean doesn’t process it for a moment.
Then Sam swears, and Dean hears the crack of a gun hammer, and when he turns to look at Leslie, she stares back at him with eyes washed black like oil spills. Something twists in his stomach; he knows without approaching her that the baby is dead. The cell phone drops from his hand as he fumbles for his gun, points it in Leslie’s direction.
gut-wrenching and scary as hell. I keep seeing that little scene in BSG where 6 snaps the baby's neck...gah!!
The ending...again, I love the whole freaking thing. I love the descriptions of Good and Evil as they debate, and Dean telling them to take a shape already. I love the whole Nebula/judgement thing, and the little "whoops" when it makes Dean immortal. And giving his soul to Leslie...and (I may be wrong here, but Sam's to the baby?) Truly brilliant.
The epilogue, and the line about not ever getting used to stasis...killed me.
and the kicker...Dean showing up to teach Leslie, and her already recognizing him? Wonderful!!
Can I friend you? I'd like to keep up on anything else you post.
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Date: 2006-07-10 02:43 am (UTC)Gods, this was fabulous. Loved the whole thing, but here are my favorite parts...
Okay, I love all of the beginning so much I can't choose. *grins*
"So that’s the way it’s going to work, you hear? One life, one death, and fuck you and your judgment, playing with people like your little cowboys and Indians, plastic figures you lose to the lawn mower and run over with your station wagon, doesn’t matter, there are more where they came from.
And the lights start to flicker. Dean resolutely does not think of it as a sign."
I love this ultimatum he gives the universe, and immediately senses that the universe doesn't give a fuck what he thinks...
"Frank is screaming, and a baby is screaming, and a woman is screaming, and Dean is tempted to join in, since it seems like the thing to do. Except, no."
Bwah ha ha! I just love how you balance the drama with the funny throughout this whole thing. There's a wonderfully crafted feeling of dread lying beneath the whole thing, but you keep it from slipping into maudlin with little things like this.
and this...killed me dead...
No time to explain it to her as well as to the emergency response woman, so he holds a finger to his lips and repeats his story at a slower pace with a few more details, trying to block out the sound of the squalling baby. The sound cuts off so quickly that Dean doesn’t process it for a moment.
Then Sam swears, and Dean hears the crack of a gun hammer, and when he turns to look at Leslie, she stares back at him with eyes washed black like oil spills. Something twists in his stomach; he knows without approaching her that the baby is dead. The cell phone drops from his hand as he fumbles for his gun, points it in Leslie’s direction.
gut-wrenching and scary as hell. I keep seeing that little scene in BSG where 6 snaps the baby's neck...gah!!
The ending...again, I love the whole freaking thing. I love the descriptions of Good and Evil as they debate, and Dean telling them to take a shape already. I love the whole Nebula/judgement thing, and the little "whoops" when it makes Dean immortal. And giving his soul to Leslie...and (I may be wrong here, but Sam's to the baby?) Truly brilliant.
The epilogue, and the line about not ever getting used to stasis...killed me.
and the kicker...Dean showing up to teach Leslie, and her already recognizing him? Wonderful!!
Can I friend you? I'd like to keep up on anything else you post.